One day, in the jungle, a kid and his cat found a giant settee. The settee was made out of stone but the cat and the child didn’t know it could turn you into frozen stone. So they sat on the ginormous settee and turned into stone. A hunter came quickly to save the child. The hunter gave the kid a poison that can save him. So the human saved the human, but unfortunately the cat couldn’t be saved. So the cat died on the settee. The child was very sad.
Stage 2 Branxton 2015
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Stage 2 Branxton 2015 
Zane I am very happy that you are using adjectives and some adverbs in your writing this week. Well done. I look foreard to seeing you write more this year!!
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Your story made us feel a little bit sad. We were glad the human was saved though.
Turquoise class year 3
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Hi Zane
Your writing this week is definitely very imaginative!
My Star: I like the adjectives used in this piece of writing. You can nearly see it!
My Wish: I think maybe you should make sure it all makes sense because though it was very good, some of it doesn’t make sense to me. Also maybe don’t use the word ‘settee as much.
Overall your writing is very good and I hope you consider my advice:]
Ciara
Kerry
Ireland
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